Production of Magazine: Double pages mock up and feedback from peers

This was my original layout but from feedback I changed certain thing in order to make it better or look more proffesional

 

I had changed the size of the outline on the boxes in order to make it stand out, this is vital as it is a detail which the eyes pick up first. On this double page I added a detail part which gives small details, I added this as it is used in existing magazines and also because it's the vital information needed with a review.

 

On this double page added a page number in order to make it look proffesional compared to what it was before, also I had edited the size of the outline of the 'Track listing' and the 'Pros and Cons' box, this is to make more space and to look more proffesional. This will be the double page that I will use for my final product.

 

I asked my peers on their thoughts and opinions on this double page spread.
My first peer commented the positive aspects and the negative aspects. The peer commented on the positive aspects, the peer said that the structure is suitable, the peer linked this point to how other conventional magazines look. Another point the peer made is that the logo placement was effective, this is because it is striking, it sticks out to the audience.
The peer commented on the negative aspects also. The peer commented on how the two boxes on the right hand side don't follow the housestyle, this is because of the use of red and white and the main colours are supposed to be black and grey.

I asked a second peer to comment on the positive and negative aspects also. The peer commented on the positive aspects. The peer commented on how the double page follows conventions that are seen in conventional magazines, this is a good aspect as it makes it look proffesional rather than unproffesional. Another point the peer made was that the double page's strapline. They said that it is a good aspect as it gives the reader a insight into what the article will contain.
The peer also commented on the negative aspects. The peer commented on how the border around the the two boxes on the right handside are too thick. The peer said that if the borders weren't as thick, there would be more space on the page for the articles. The peer also commented on the fact that the band's name 'Circle Motions' was mentioned too much, the peer built onto this by saying that if something is repeated so much, it can get too familiar to te audience and then it would become repetative if it is said too much.


I have changed this like I did with my cover and contents page. I changed them all to the same as it would keep to the house style and it would make all the pages the same. However due to the colour of the text, it blended in with the black at the top of the page so the text was changed from black to white. This shows that I have developed my background and moved away from the normal type of background.





Do you think having this gradient colour is better than having a block coloured background?
The gradient colour is better as it makes the page look different as the majority of conventional magazines contain block coloured backgrounds.
Are there any negative aspects on my double page that stand out?
There is one negative aspect. On the picture at the top of the right page, the picture has a white outline going around the picture. This would be better if it didn't have it as it would make it look more proffesional and conventional.